Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts
Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts

Tuesday, April 15, 2014

Web Log: A Morning's Sparks

My mind sparks in the oddest ways sometimes. The best times are when I've had some really good sleep, like last night. I even woke around 1 a.m. for a brief glimpse of the moon eclipse. And I still got good sleep. (Good Sleeping: topic for another post.)

I started with Camp NaNoWriMo because I'm supposed to be editing my 2009 novel draft. This is a task a lot more difficult than I supposed. I found a great page of links to the stages and parts of revision. After reading one of the posts on types of editing, I decided to follow Amanda On Writing.

I liked the design of her tumblr blog and decided to install the same theme on my tumblr. First, I had to log in. Which was complicated by having to use Chrome since the latest Flash update crippled Safari on my ancient iMac. Soooooo ... reset password adventure!

After updating the tumblr, I had to add a "Pin It" button to my website because resetting the tumblr password meant accessing email. Reading email is always a nexus of distraction. Curse you email links!

Which led to fiddling with the design of the website because suddenly the colors look all garish after changing to a muted tumblr design. Fiddling with the design means arranging colors, selecting web colors, and trying out textured backgrounds (none of which looked right).

Which brings me here. Time for a break. Then some novel revision. And then, perhaps, more color contemplation.

Monday, March 17, 2014

Editing a Novel



I've signed up for Camp NaNoWriMo, the poorer, less selfish cousin of NaNoWriMo. Instead of luscious luxury hotels, we camp out under the stars and instead of a novel, we write whatever. Although you can write a novel, too. Or anything else your heart desires.

I will continue desultory editing of my 2009 novel draft, Cosmic Control: The Prime Locus Learns Something. The real learning will be by me as I continue investigating ways to edit.  So far, I've discovered two techniques that work for me: breaking the novel into scenes and writing short sentences.

The scene divisions will allow me flexibility in rearranging the plot. The short sentences will (hopefully) point out exactly what is going on in each scene. I can't remember where I got the scene idea. From scriptwriting, possibly.

The short sentence idea came from the book Several Short Sentences About Writing by Verlyn Klinkenborg which is a unique book written all in short sentences. It's more like a poem than a non-fiction book. Shorter sentences are clearer and to the point. This should help remove vagueness and focus the action of each scene.

Although camp begins April 1st, I will get going before then. Or continue on from my failed attempt in February. Hoping camp will keep me motivated to move forward.

Monday, December 23, 2013

Novel Update

Happy Christmas!

The plan didn't work. So, okay. I'm at 63,340 which is not far from 70,000 but I won't reach that before 2014. Or at least I think I won't. I wasn't planning on writing today and yet I sat down and wrote 1,630 easy words. I just kept going and stuff got onto the page.  So, there it is. I doubt I'll write any more on this novel before year's end but I never know. I may find myself in a creative drive after Christmas.

The story continues to surprise and entertain me. Looking forward to finding out what happens.

Sunday, December 1, 2013

Goals for finishing this year's novel

The official count is in: 56255. That's what I managed to write before the deadline and the word updater was turned off in my time zone. I continue to write with a final goal of 70,000 words because this seems a goodly amount of words to find the ending. Few NaNoWriMo participants arrive at the end of the story with 50,000 words. I wasn't one of them.

I believe I have found the ending. Sometimes it is like being in Wonderland as I start down the path to the end and the path wriggles and disappears into the forest. Characters become recalcitrant, things move from their intended location, and odd technical story stuff happens. However, I persist and am using this blog to publicly post my goal of 2000 per day (or around there averaged out) until reaching goal.

Red days are zero word
days. Yellow and orange are
low word days when I wrote
less than 1667 words.
This has worked before. I hope it works again. The holidays are crap writing times so I'll skip writing until after the new year, once I achieve 70K. Which means I need to arrive at the goal by around the 12th. After that life gets weird until the 1st of January.

Glad to see that each year I have fewer zero word days. This year there were only four. Having a stretch goal really helped. Also, it sometimes takes me 600 words or even 1000 to get into the groove.

I might return here periodically to update my word count. I will definitely post when I reach 70,000 or something close to it.

Monday, November 25, 2013

NaNoWriMo Summation Scene

I am a bit early on this as I have not yet achieved my ultimate goal of 70,000 words. However, I have reached the National Novel Writing Month mandate of 50,000 words. I'm at 50,491 actually.

The joy is there but not the irrational whoops of joy from previous years. I know so much more about novel writing, my creative process, the editing process, and what happens when I finish a book. It is true with novels as with art that you never finish a work. You just stop at an interesting place. It is also true about novel writing that the first draft is just a beginning. For sheer quantities of revisions, script writing for feature films wins out. Novel revisions make up for that in word quantity.

Yes, it's all about revisions folks. Once the glow of creation wears off, it's back to the salt mines of checking plot lines, character arcs, grammar, and other mundane technicalities such as deciding where the chapters begin and end. Unlike my fine art process in which I generally create an image in one sitting with little preparation or afterthought. I suspect my art could use a little kick in the development pants, too.

This year's novel pulled in characters from previous novels, as well as embellished plot lines, and added a third book to the Cosmic Control series. Sorta weird as I had no intention to do any of that when I started writing. I'm still grappling with a summation or log line for the plot. Here's a first try.

Cosmic Control: Defeat of the UnRegs
Working cover with
working title.
The story involves two soul twins who were separated before birth and came to life in separate universes with parallel time lines, which should have guaranteed they would never meet. And in a normal world they wouldn't have. However, the Prime Locus is tampering with the time lines again and the twins are needed to thwart his vicious and devious plans to destroy the power of gifteds. Enter the UnRegs—the UnRegistered Citizens—a huge confabulation of pirate-style, off-grid individuals who have been around for so long they are quite numerous and have fostered a wide variety of subcultures. Some UnRegs are lawful, some aren't, and some suffer from situational ethics. They have their own goals for changing history. Within all this, the two sisters must determine a course of action that will save time, prevent collapsing the time lines in favor of the evil Prime Locus, and yet still emerge with their identities and lives intact. (Your basic save the universe scenario.)

It's a lot of fun. Well, it has been for me anyway. And I intend to continue having fun for a couple more weeks yet while ignoring the distant call to get down to serious editing work.

Monday, November 4, 2013

My NaNoWriMo Goal

My Word Count
I've upped my word count goal from 1667 per day to 3200. So far I'm very motivated, possibly because it's my goal. I reasoned that as a retired person I could, in theory, write 3-4 hours per day. I'm not sure I could do that every day. However, I can write two hours a day which averages out (so far) to 2898 words per day. Since I'm writing more words per day, I really crunch on past  a lot of story details. I have to stop, go back, and add in scene and character descriptions. There's a lot more "he said/she said" than with a lower daily word count goal. More urgency. Although, I find I write much later in the day because looming midnight is a motivator. I don't want to go to bed with my goal not met.

When I set the goal I wondered what this would do to the process. In National Novel Writing Month (NaNoWriMo) there's the famous 2nd Week Slump. It still exists for me except I'm now calling it the 10,000 word slump. As I approach that mark, the slump sets in.

I find I'm less willing to have a low count or no count word day. 3200 is harder to make up that 1667.

My process has stayed the same. I still blog, research, post things to Facebook, and use house work when I'm blocked or procrastinating (which might be the same thing).

I like being ahead of the curve (so far) and I like knowing that if I keep up the pace I will finish by, at least, the third week. Then I can use the rest of November to finish the story. And I will get a free and clear Thanksgiving for the first time in 7 years. I'm not sure what the pace will be (or the daily word count goal) when I get to 50,000. Ideally, I'd like to get to 70,000 by the end of the first week in December.

I'll let you know.

Thursday, May 16, 2013

Who I write like today ...



I write like
Mario Puzo
I Write Like by Mémoires, journal software. Analyze your writing!
Because it's a different author every time I try this. Perhaps I am an emerging novelist.

Monday, May 13, 2013

Cool Writing Prompt

I met April Michelle Davis, founder of Editorial Inspirations, years ago at an agency mixer. She had just relocated to the Richmond area and was eagerly searching for writers. I've followed her over the years, through her newsletter, enjoying the steady growth of her business. This month's writing prompt is pretty cool.
WRITING PROMPT OF THE MONTH
A knock at the door catches you off guard. Upon answering it, you’re greeted by a man who says he’s from the future—and he can prove it. More important, he says he has information that will save your life. Write this scene.
Besides a monthly prompt, her newsletter includes crunchy tidbits for writers and indexers. I wish I still lived in the Richmond area so I could catch her presentations.

Wednesday, May 1, 2013

You're never too old to write a screenplay and two other tips from Corey Mandell

Grabbed from Corey's May/June newsletter.

Are the screenwriting contests a waste of time and money? Mack V.
Most of them are, as they are designed as profit-making ventures. So if you're going to enter contests, I'd stick to the ones that the industry actually pays some attention to. Here's the three I'd target:

The Nicholl Screenwriting Contest
The Austin Screenplay and Teleplay Competition
Final Draft's Big Break Screenwriting Contest

And if your writing has an indie bent, you may also want to submit to the Sundance Screenwriters Lab and Film Independent's Screenwriting Lab.

(Full disclosure: I [Corey] have ties to both Final Draft, which sponsors my Professional Screenwriting Workshops, and the Film Independent Screenwriting Lab, for which I serve as a mentor. Regardless, I would whole-heartedly recommend their excellent programs. Okay, enough with the disclosures.)  

How old is too old to break into the business? —Lou W.
You won't be submitting a photo or bio with your script so it's doubtful anyone will know your age. They'll only know how good your script is or isn't. One of my script coaching clients, a 57-year-old South African woman, just sold her first two spec pilots. David Seidler was in his late 60s when he wrote The Kings Speech. Alvin Sargent was in his 70s when he wrote Spiderman. Being too old is never the reason someone doesn't have a career, it is only the excuse.

What's the biggest mistake you see new writers making? Laura F.
Following the "rules". There's a growing chorus of experts telling writers what they need to do to break into the business, what kinds of scripts they need to write, how they should write them, and what has to happen on what page.  

So what is the one thing almost all these experts all have in common? They have never actually had a writing career. In fact, many of them tried to break into the business and failed. Now they make their living telling everyone else how to break into the business.

Connect with Corey
Corey Mandell | Professional Screenwriting Workshops
310-243-6758 | Hermosa Beach, California, USA
corey@coreymandell.net  | http://coreymandell.net On facebook: http://bit.ly/coreyfanpage

Friday, March 29, 2013

Laying Fallow

Much like the ground outside which (although warming) is still laying fallow, so, too am I. Creatively I plink and ponder. Not much gets done. I contemplate spring, watch the birds, and listen to the cats meow outside the door. Whenever I can I sit in the sun, soaking up heat and vitamin D while crocheting, knitting, reading, and pondering the universe.

Next month will be different. I've signed up for Camp NaNoWriMo, much like National Novel Writing Month (NaNoWriMo: write 50K words of a novel in 30 days), except you can choose whatever wordy project comes to mind. Temporarily I've signed up for a screenplay. (Or is it script? I never know. I guess script covers them all from stageplay to TV spec.)

As usual, I am laying fallow as I do in October, resisting working, letting stories and dreams flit through my brain without trying to capture them. Come April 1 (no joke!) I'll start writing as action and characters jell on the page.

I like this adventure. I have yet to turn a profit (as I drone each time I begin) and I don't care. I do wish I was more disciplined about the actual seat-in-the-chair-fingers-to-the-keyboard thing. However, I'l settle for what I can get. I'm flexible that way.

Thursday, March 7, 2013

Story Basics in Graph, Table, and Diagram

Here's a clean copy of Kurt Vonnegut's graph of character arcs from the shape of stories video.
Kurt Vonnegut's diagram illustrated by Elaine Greywalker
In the video, he mentions that the names of the plot arcs are just reminders; not limitations. For example: Boy Gets Girl is your basic romantic comedy no matter who gets whom.

The "Cinderella" plot line (which Kurt says will make you a million dollars) could be fitted to the character arc of Katniss Everdeen from The Hunger Games trilogy—with modifications. The first book is classic Cinderella. Over the entire trilogy, it's a bit different. Primarily, Katniss goes below her beginning level, unlike Cinderella. Secondarily, she ends in the mid-level between Good and Ill Fortune. An interesting exercise would be to graph her arc across the trilogy on Kurt's chart.

Here's Aristotle's version, which is rather more conceptual.
Aristotle's Table of Plots
A good exercise would be to make character arc graphs for these concepts. 

By the way, the central line is "moderate complexity" in case you were wondering. I know I was.

While reading Story by Robert McKee, I made this triangular diagram which is a modification of Mr. McKee's from page 45 of the book.
My version of Rober McKee's plot triangle.
The three corners are indicators of plot types and not quantity of plots. Mr. McKee doesn't write much about the non-narrative plot area. It's still a big undiscovered sea. And, yes, another good exercise would be to make character arc graphs from this triangle.

Friday, December 7, 2012

I'm a Scribophile

NaNoWriMo recommended Scribophile for year-round writing empowerment. It looks like they have the same fun attitude and wild activity as NaNoWriMo. I have a profile there. Hoping it will be useful.

Working title with temporary cover art.
I continue to work on They Came From the Red Mist. I've made it to 52,905 words. The plan is to write 750 words per day until the 21st or thereabouts with the goal of reaching 70,000. I'll update my count on Scribophile as well as continue to do do my own tracking of words written each day. I made a little text file in Scrivener where I log the date and the total. Not real exciting or dynamic, yet it works.

My monthly newsletter went out yesterday. To subscribe, sign up here. It's an easy way to get a quick look at what I've been up to.

Scribophile, the online writing group for serious writers

Saturday, December 1, 2012

NaNoWriMo Win and Postpartum Blues

I did it again. I wrote another novel draft -- or 50,100 words of one, anyway. Which makes me a Winner in National Novel Writing Month terms. This is my seventh win.

As usual, I wrote a SciFi/fantasy story. This one includes time travel and people from the future. I love people from the future. And aliens. My aliens are simply people not-from-earth who look like people from earth. Generally, they are more advanced technologically or they practice magic.

I haven't been able to put this year's story into a log line yet. The through line is vaguely about love in that the hero gets involved in rescuing his wife. It's also about talent, a theme I love. Talent is generally under nurtured. I try to point out the advantages of talent and the waste of talent suppressed or undeveloped. In the books, talent refers to magic or magical powers or some combination of occult, magic, and intuition.

This year's main character, Lauren, is targeted by a society called the Pathbreakers as the crux of their plan to dominate the universe. She is chosen because she is gifted with a physiology that affects time lines. She is repeatedly abducted in her various parallel time lines to ensure the time lines collapse into one: the one that makes the Pathbreakers supreme.

Her husband, Ted, works with specialists from the Chronometry Department of the FBI, to rescue the "home" Lauren and return her to her native time, in an attempt to restore the parallels and defeat the Pathbreakers.

There's also an off-worlder (the PC term for alien) who is a master Chronometrist and a Philonaut (a philosophical astronaut) with his own agenda about how the Lauren time line should unfold. He's on his own side.

What Made This Year Unique
Storywise
1. Very few props or magical items.
2. No magical creatures.
3. Ordinary locations.

Writing Process
4. No zero word days.
5. Slow start.
6. Easy finish: 2500 words on the last day as opposed to 5000.
7. No coffee!
8. No write-ins!
9. No cafe writing!

It is, as usual, a big let down when I win. I'm off later today to the Thank God It's Over gathering. This helps a little to ease the pain.

I plan to go on writing. I was quite successful with this last year. I eventually finished and self-published that novel. This year I'm not so sure. I might dip into a past novel draft and work on that instead of working on this one. There are some thorny problems with the plot that should be easier to resolve if I take a break.

Anyway. It's over. I miss it. Writing alone is not the same. Still, it's a fun month and proved to me, once again, that having an ongoing active project is so good for me.

Friday, November 23, 2012

My Convoluted Novel Writing Process

"Dancing Black"
Time to write the obligatory annual "why is my novel-writing process so crazy" post. Let me tell you what that involves at this point (at 30,000 words) in the novel.
  1. Spend time playing Facebook games, i.e. Solitaire Blitz, Fantasy Kingdoms, etc.
  2. Resolve niggling technical problems that can remain unresolved with minimal discomfort. Today I investigated how to share my computer's wifi internet connection with my iPhone via Bluetooth PAN. Whoops! There goes 30 minutes.
  3. Clean the kitchen.
  4. Write a blog post.
  5. Update my Goodreads lists.
  6. Write 500 words.
  7. Play more Facebook games.
  8. Research random stuff from the book. This is how I discovered that Waffle House is used by FEMA as an indication of the severity of damage after natural disasters. It's called "The Waffle House Index."
  9. Write 620 words.
  10. Have lunch.
  11. Watch a movie or series episode.
  12. Write 120 words.
  13. Create a character sketch using DAZ 3D.
  14. Make holiday art.
  15. Post holiday art to Zazzle.
  16. Despair over ever reaching 50k. Think this might be the year I give up.
  17. Visit the NaNoWriMo forums. 
  18. Write 120 words.
  19. Generate an iTunes Genius playlist.
  20. Post the playlist to my NaNoWriMo profile.
As long as I keep writing I'll eventually get to the point where I can sit down and bang out 1500 or 2000 words again. Until then I do dumb stuff from the list. 

Each year I hope and believe that this year will be different. This will be the year I sit down every day, bang out the words, and then have a normal life. Even if I review blog posts from previous years i miss the whole my process sucks bit and only notice how I kept writing as the days went by. 

I guess that's not such a bad thing.

Tuesday, September 11, 2012

Keeping up with Kat

Kat and I met on the internet in the mid-90's. She was blogging under "Kat Litter" and I had just created my new last name: Greywalker. We both thought we were the only ones. She contacted me first and we been friendly every since. I've followed her career ... and read the books - which are really good. That is saying something because I don't normally read paranormal books, particularly ones which include vampires.

In the article, there's a bit a backstory which I didn't know about and a nice summary of how Seattle inspires her stories.
Seattle Wrote.: Seattle Author: Doing What You Love: With an English teacher for a father, it's not much of a surprise that author Kat Richardson started writing as a child.

Wednesday, April 18, 2012

Interesting Beginnings: Crucible

"This crucible leaks something horrible," the first magician said, poking into the carved stone bowl on the table. "What are we supposed to do?"

Two others stood beside him.

 "We aren't supposed to do anything," said one. "It's what are we going to do?"

"Dunno," said the first. "We can't do bloody anything with this piece of shit." 

"Sssshhhh!" said the other. "You'll offend it."

"Offend it? How can you offend a piece of stone?"

"Everyone knows crucibles have inner lives. You need their cooperation," said the other, a smart woman and the best witch of the age.

"Well, this one's been cooperationed out," said the magician. His black hair fell over his eyes and he shook it out. He put his wand back in his pocket.

"We'll get another," said the third one, a young man with shocking red hair. "Here." He pointed to the dusty shelves behind him against the wall. "Bound to be another one."

The magician sighed. "We need this one! Or weren't you paying attention?"

The woman sighed. "Yes, we were all paying attention, but you can hardly get the cooperation of a broken crucible."

"We're meant to use this one! It's in the prophecy. It's in the book. It's the one made for the job." The magician practically screamed. He'd had a very long day and he was wet from the storm.

"Well," the woman sniffed. "Obviously the prophecy has got it wrong."

"The prophecy can't get it wrong."

"Yes. Yes it can. It's only written by a man." The woman gave the magician a dangerous look.

"And passed down by many others," said the young red head. He stood between them holding a granite crucible and pestle. "I found these ... over there." He pointed a dank corner of the shelves. They were covered in dust balls held in place by thick cobwebs.

"You could have cleaned it first," said the woman.

"Thought we were in a hurry," said the boy.

"And how do you expect us to mix anything in a crucible filled with dirt?" She sneered at him and pulled the crucible from his grasp.

"Ow!" he said.
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"Robin Hood: A Maiden's Tale" Robin Hood and her merry woman defend the poor one woman at a time.
Statistics
Total Pages Written: 45
Daily Page Count Goal: 4
Pages Written Today: 6

Wednesday, April 11, 2012

Interesting Beginnings: Jaia

In the spring, for reasons unknown, I get a medieval thing in my head. It never lasts long enough for me to make anything of it. This story may have been the seed for my third novel, "From the Isles of Orion," which takes place in a future dystopian medieval world. As in, the world devolves into the medieval age after a major war or some kind of catastrophe. (That part is pretty vague.)
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The family shield showed an eagle, the eagle of protection. The old "eagle eye" or perhaps it was a hawk. She should really study up on her birds. She knew, anyway, that there was something noble about the emblem and it meant that she had inherited the paternalistic job of caring for the local community. This was a symbiotic relationship as the estate was supported by the income from the community. The baron/prince/sire protected in return for offerings. One of their landowners had done quite well, practically propping up the fiefdom/barony all by himself. Jaia knew this was bad. Having one support put them at risk. However, all by himself, the Laird of Loch Lynch provided half of their income. The rest came from small holders, a few merchants, and the monastery. Yes the monastery. They made a casked brandy and a goat cheese favored by the free worlds.

Yes, worlds. This was perhaps the biggest secret of leadership. While the general population thrived in ignorance, Jaia, as heir, knew about those from other worlds, other galaxies, who traded with them. On some worlds farming was no longer viable for those who had either destroyed their ground/earth or had covered it over with endless structures. Either way, it was an advantage for them.

Jaia was adept at covering over her knowledge. She had grown up with the dualistic life, ever remembering to change her stance and language for the locals and then back again when in the privacy of her home.

She lived with only a father. Her mother having died of some local fungus for which there was no known cure at this time and place. That was the official story. Unofficially, her mother now lived a disease free life on another planet. They spoke from time to time. Her mother was happy. Jaia missed her a lot.

At 16 Jaia was expected to become engaged; had actually left it a bit late, according to local custom. She stood beside the window, holding an embroidery project and sighed. She itched. Under her clothing something had bit her. She sighed again. A pox on this ancient garb! Lucky Mum dressed in something bacteria and disease resistant on a clean planet. Jaia thought about cursing her life and then stopped. It was not wise to spread that sort of energy. She crossed herself and silently appealed for grace. She sighed again.

The door flew open. Standing in the doorway was her lady-in-waiting, Trista.

"What ho, Trista?" asked Jaia calmly.

"My lady! He has arrived!" Trista's eyes were wide. She gasped audibly.

She's been at the dried cherries again, Jaia thought. "Who's arrived?"

"You're intended!"

"I have an intended?"

"You jest! Let not the Lord Darca hear you!" 

"He shan't hear me if you do your job and keep him from my private chambers."

Trista quickly closed the door behind her and came up to her, putting her face so close to hers she could see the blackheads on her nose.

"My lady, I am as silent as the night."

"Without owls, I presume?"

"You must attend. The Lord Darca is here and he will wish to see you."

"I believe I can countenance that wish."

"Come! I will help you prepare."

"Prepare? Is he so dangerous?"

"You can't be presented to him in your common dress."

"Why not? He will become accustomed to it soon enough if we wed."

"If? How can you not accept him? If you wait much longer you will acquire the status of dowager and then none will have you."

"Trista, you may be astounded to learn that I am not interested in being had."

Trista stood shocked into silence.

Jaia sighed. "But if it will bring you happiness, let us prepare for this unknown lord."

"Thank you, miss. Else I would have had to send a disappointing message to your father." 

"Oh? And would he dress me?"

Trista relapsed into her shocked pose.

"Never mind. Let's be dressing, shall we?"

As she dressed, Jaia thought about the hounds and her hunting horse. She'd much rather be racing through the countryside. She didn't particularly care for fox hunting. It merely gave her an excuse to pursue an normally unladylike penchant for galloping through the landscape. A good run would relax her. But then Lord Darca would have to wait and that was unacceptable.

She wished her father had remembered to alert her to this new suitor. Perhaps he had grown tired of her exacting standards. Perhaps there was some reason she needed to be betrothed right now. Perhaps ... well, useless to speculate. Best to get dressed and get it over with so she could be enlightened as to her father's purpose.

Wednesday, April 4, 2012

Interesting Beginnings: Old Man with Forked Stick

I don't know where this came from. I got in a mood one day and this beginning unrolled itself like a movie in my mind. I tried to come up with time references that didn't include a clock. I've decided since that the normal ways to address time are the best – they're less distracting.
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The old man hung on his staff, leaning painfully against the forked top. The forked top had once been the point of focus for his magic, now it was simply a convenient holder for his armpit so he could walk on his own. His sister had attempted repeatedly to have him move in with her, but he refused. He knew that was the way to losing his independence, and he needed it badly. Very badly. He was old and fading but he still had much to do. And much he could do. He hadn't had an apprentice in half an age. Perhaps word was getting around or had got around about his lack of attentiveness. No matter. 

As he walked along the woodland path he reviewed the eager apprentices who had spent their years in service, learning the way of the mage. He could also lead them along the shamanic path. Only one apprentice had chosen that path. It was longer and more arduous and she had been eager and full of ideas and energy. She hadn't made it, but then that was the point of the shaman's path. To weed out those who were unsuited. He blinked back a few tears, remembering his own shamanic journey. He had squeaked by, he felt, with a lot of luck and the advice of, surprisingly, an old widow in a small village.

As the sun set, the noises in the woods surrounding him changed. He paused and looked up at the torn segment of sky he could see between the tree tops. Soon the leaves would be changing. Already there was a mild scent of rot from the undergrowth. No clouds. Moisture was collecting in the air and on the ground.

He sighed, wiped his eyes. Not seeing as good as he used to. Still able to read the book, though. Smiling vaguely at something that flickered in his mind, he straightened and pressed forward again clinging to his stick.

As he walked along, hobbling every so often and pausing to rest, other memories came and went, flitting through the vastness of his mind like the birds under the canopy.

Dark had arisen by the time he reached his sister's door. He knocked politely, and then waited, adjusting his hat so that it perched once again straight upon his head.

The door opened.

 "Wenzel!" his sister said as she wiped her hands on a cloth. Still clutching the rag in one hand she embraced him firmly. "Come in! come in!" she stood sideways and waited for him to pass. “You’re just in time for supper," she said as she closed the door behind them.

"Here, let me take that stick."

Wenzel stopped walking. "It's not a stick. It's my staff."

"Stick, staff, whatever."

"Well, I can't give it to you. It's holding me up at the moment."

"Wenzel! Have you walked all this way?"

Wenzel said nothing, continuing to make his way toward the kitchen and a bench in front of table he rightfully knew would soon be groaning with food. His sister followed him along the darkened passage.

"You have, haven't you?"

Wenzel sat with an expulsion of air that morphed into a relieved sigh. "Ahhhhh," he breathed. The staff he still held in his hands. He took in a deep breath full of yeasty and beefy fumes. 

"Here, give me that," said his sister take the staff.

"Careful!" he said raising his hands up in a cautionary gesture. "You don't know what you've got there. Place it some place out of the way. I don't want Ned falling over it again."

"No worries about Ned," the sister said, thinking about her husband. "He's got eyes twice as good as yours."

Wenzel muttered something inaudible which sounded like something between indignation and resignation. "Oofff!"he said in the next minute. "Arrgg, my feet."

"Serve you right," said his sister returning to the kitchen. "You shouldn't have walked. You should have sent for us to fetch you."

"And waited for weeks? No. Not when I can get here in under a day."

Priscilla, his sister, turned and looked hard at him. "Under a day. A walk that should be but a few inches of movement of shadow on a wall." Her face dissolved into concern and something that might have presaged tears in another woman, and then, abruptly, became hard.

"That's it. I'm not asking anymore. I'm telling. You're moving in with us." With a flounce she returned to the fire and the pots.

Wenzel sighed very deeply. "Can I get a mug of water?" he asked meekly.

It was fully dark when the threesome, Wenzel, Priscilla and Ned, finished the evening meal.

"Come along," said Ned. "Let's into something comfortable and have that mug of ale."

"Aye," agreed Wenzel.

Priscilla jumped up quickly and disappeared out the door, returning moments later with the staff. "Here you are, grandfather," she said gently.

Wenzel snatched the staff. "I'm no one's grandfather!"

"Well, you look like one." Her gaze softened. "Go on, have your drink and sit in front of the fire. The nights are drawing in and we have a bit of warming before we go to bed."

Wenzel groaned his way to his feet and plodded out the door into the passageway. He came upon Ned already seated in a rough, sturdy chair and the fire crackling as it fed on the dry sticks. Wenzel sank down gratefully in the companion chair, waiting for him. Ned jumped up and reached to the hearth to grab the ale mug warming there.

"Here you are," he said presenting Wenzel with the ale. Then he poked the fire a bit . He added a few medium logs from the hopper and sat down again.

"Going to be a bad fall, I fear. Too wet. Too much rain," Ned said.

"That shouldn't trouble you. You've got cows and goats."

"It will affect the trading and we're close to the bone as it is. Haven't recovered from the harsh winter. Lost three animals in that one."

"A three animal winter," said Wenzel almost to himself. Yes, he thought. Bad. However, he continued philosophically, it's been worse. "You'll recover," he said to Ned in a raised, firm tone. "The autumn will be long and you'll find the fields will give a extra spurt of yield before the winter closes in."

"How do you know these things?"

"Ah ha ha," said Wenzel mildly, "when you choose the path of magic I'll explain it to you." They both laughed at that and sipped their ale. They had been sitting in companionable silence and the fire had burned low when Priscilla looked in.

"I've warmed your bed," she said to Wenzel. "You can go up anytime." She paused. "Provided, of course, that you can get up the ladder."

"Oh yes, still do that. Lots of ladders at my place."

Priscilla sat on the simple, lighter chair that remained. "Perhaps we should add on a sleeping area down here." Priscilla looked at Ned. He pulled the pipe out of his mouth and blew gazing thoughtfully at the fire.

"Yes, we can do that. We've still time before the true winter closes in."

"Oh, no, no," Wenzel protested. "Don't go to any trouble for me. I'm not staying that long."

"Yes, you are and that's an end to it," said Priscilla firmly with a look in her eyes that softened the tone.

"Then you'll need to build more than a sleep area. I need room for my scrolls, books, implements and animals." Wenzel smiled to himself knowing this would be a difficult request. "Wait until next summer. I can get through one more winter on my own."

"You've been saying that for many slantings of the sun. No more. You're not safe there anymore. You won't be able to take care of your place when the winter hits. You can't make the repairs anymore and Ned and I can't be running over every day to check on you. What if something happens in the night?"

"Then it was meant to be. What is, is."

Priscilla stared into the fire, carefully keeping her face turned. A hand went up to her eyes. "No, Wenzel," she said more softly. "I can't leave you alone for one more winter. I could never forgive myself if something happened to you that could have been prevented by you living within these walls."

Wenzel said nothing. Ned rose and tapped his pipe out into the hearth. He kicked the remaining embers which had burned low. Sparks flew as he pushed the remaining hot pieces together with his hobnail boots. He stretched and made a deep noise in his chest. He yawned.

"Gotta get some sleep. I'll see you in bed, Prissy," he said. He turned and left the room. Priscilla and Wenzel rose together, Wenzel leaning on his staff. Priscilla took a last look at the fire, ascertaining that the embers were too low to cause any trouble in the night. Then she put her arm lightly around her brother's shoulders.

Sunday, April 1, 2012

This is going better than I'd hoped

I am amazed at how much easier it is to write a script when I have an rough outline of what is going to happen. While preparing for Script Frenzy, I discovered that I am a little weak on structure. I mean, it's obvious, isn't it? My scripts wander like nightmares on Serpentine Avenue. The characters do things yet not much seems to happen. There isn't so much an ending as there is a reaching of appropriate page count.

Using "beat sheets" from two script specialists (Michael Hauge and Blake Snyder – if you must know), I sketched in brief summaries of what happens when. Thus removing some of the blocks that stop me from forward movement. I haven't tried this in the past due to my aversion to regimentation. However, having completed only two scripts out of six attempts ... I really needed to give a written outline a shot.

I'm writing and I don't want to stop! So uncharacteristic of me when writing a script. It's usually like pulling hen's teeth.

I hope this keeps up.

There's a counter on my home page where you can follow along. You can also check the statistics on my Script Frenzy profile.
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"whammablamma" (working title) Gender role reversal in 1300's English village.
Statistics
Total pages written: 5
Daily page count goal: 3.3
Pages written today: 5

Wednesday, March 28, 2012

Interesting Beginnings: Peach

This is a bit of flash fiction I generated as a participant in a writer's group in Second Life. The word "peach" had to be included in the story.
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It was a peach of a deal. He winked at her. She saluted – with her mind. He had a good rap. She could tell he was a helluva salesman, or thought he was anyway. She supposed that others had bought from him. It was likely. She wasn't buying anything.

She relaxed into her mind's eye and took another look. Yes. He was like most salesman, honest about what he told her and scrupulous about leaving out what might prevent her from buying. After all, he was trying to help her and he didn't want anything to get in the way.

She smiled back.

"Sorry, no," she said. "I don't really need one."

"Today?" he said.

"Ever. Undoubtedly." She added the last quickly to forestall further discussion.

"Can I buy you lunch?" he asked.

"Can you?" she said.

He laughed. "Well, of course. Would you allow me to treat you to lunch?"

There it was. That twinkle in his eye, that little light of merriment that said, We're all in this together why not enjoy it?

Why not indeed, she thought.

"No," she said. "I've got to get back."

He looked as if he was going to protest. She could almost hear him asking, "Back to what?" She was glad he didn't ask. She would not have been able to explain with anything like coherency.

"Okay, then," he said. He looked down at his feet. Then he looked up and raised his hand in salute. "Later!"

That was fast, she thought. But she merely turned, pulling her keys out of her pocket and heading for the parking lot. She meandered among the cars, finding her red Saturn after a couple of false positives. It needed a wash. The paint was scratched along the passenger side from too close a connection with shrubbery along the roadway. She sighed, turned the key, and got in. 

The car moved easily along the roadway. She thought of him in a sort of abstract way, wondering what he really had on his mind. There was some darkness lurking just behind his face, moving along the surface of his skin. Some dark thing that he held back, as if it were so huge it would overwhelm her.

She got that a lot. Men often wanted to confide in her. Usually all she had to do was wait. But this time it wasn't working. This time she might have to work at it. To make him tell her, some how. This would be rough. He would go on trying to sell her and she would go on refusing, waiting for the time when he would finally open up and let her have it.

She hoped it wouldn't take too much longer and she hoped he told her the whole truth the first time instead of drawing it out over weeks. She hated the bits and pieces.

She pushed on the brake pedal. Her purse and packages slid to the front of the car, stopped by the passenger side foot rest. The car reared up a bit on it's front end and settled back down. She would have to start paying attention. Construction up ahead.

Forward motion stopped. The car ahead of hers was just as dirty as hers. She could see the silhouette of a head bobbing rhythmically.

What was it? Why didn't he just tell her and come out with it?